Der letzte Kuss

letzten 8 zeilen sind echt klasse!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
rt auch gut aba die letzten acht sind echt wunderbar beschrieben!!!!
sehr schöner text...bin gespannt aufs audio!!
 
sehr schöner text, nur streich die beiden zeilen mit bitch da raus, das wirkt total daneben und vermiest die romantisch-tragische grundstimmung durch diesen pubertären ausdruck
 
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jetzt les mal schön du hornzon
 
ja genau wie deine mutter
aber da deine mutter ne houre ist bin ich keine jungfrau
mein arsch ist jungfrau was man von deinem nicht behaupten kann bitch ass boy
 
haha du Jungfrau


hast du schon mal ne Frau nackt gesehen? außer im Fernsehen?
 
ehrliches thema,
reime gehen okay.

hab nur erste strophe gelesen.

grammatikalische anmerkung:
ein schlechtes gewissen kann man nicht merken,
sondern nur HABEN oder BEKOMMEN.

yo
 
nein, glaub mir,
ich hatte deutsch-LK und bin grammatik-klugscheißer nr 1.

also gib beim nächsten mal auch ehrliches und vernünftiges
feedback, bruder.

natürlich kannst du dein schlechtes gewissen spüren oder
etwas davon merken, dass du schlechtes gewissen bekommst...
aber halt der satz.
 
hm ok dann isses halt falsch.

mir acuh egal

Als Pillath sein Zuhause verlas und so gescheint hat wie noch niemand zuvor hab ich meinen Glauben in Grammatik im Rap verloren :)

ich geb immer ehrliches Feedback aber ich find nur wenige Texte wirklich überzeugend ;)
 
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